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Help! Looking for beta readers.

Discussion in 'Fiction Discussion' started by SamuraiSoda, Jan 10, 2017.

  1. Hi, SV. I have been working on an urban fantasy special education story and I am looking for feedback on what I have so far. I will upload the word document later.
     
  2. Here is the uploaded file :drag me. Please PM me your critique.
     
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  3. StellarMonarch

    StellarMonarch Ursa Major, Hibernating

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    Busy right now, but I've noticed a lot punctuation mistakes.
    I recommend you divy up the paragraphs as well and read the text out loud to see where the sentences don't flow well.
     
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  4. Thanks, man. Well, I tend to write late at night and it shows.
     
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  5. Hykal94

    Hykal94 The Kitteh Knight of Islam

    Well if you tidy it up a bit, and make it look cleaner, I'll be sure to take a peek. :)
     
  6. Well, I kind of did.
     
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  7. StellarMonarch

    StellarMonarch Ursa Major, Hibernating

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    Hm. Still plenty of punctuation errors; try putting periods where sentences should stop and commas when you need a silence.

    Oh, and this wonderful thing:
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  8. True, I need to take a look at it. I should've started this thread earlier.
     
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  9. I've just started rewriting this, can I PM you @StellarMonarch because I do not want to clutter this thread with it.
     
  10. StellarMonarch

    StellarMonarch Ursa Major, Hibernating

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    Sorry, gotta go to bed buddy. And I have school, too. I won't be available for *clock* 16 hours.
     
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